I wanted to review your story at the end and so here I am. I do like it. I find it kind of odd that you would not only switch genders of everyone but switch the roles of the gender as well, making the males the farer sex, well, our bits down below are a great deal more sensitive than women, but physically speaking it's a bit far fetched. I like the assertiveness of your female characters.
I think that you've dropped the ball with developing a stronger relationship between Harry and Harri. While I have read other AU Harry stories where he meets his female self, at leasting he's only meeting her and not meating her.
If you are going to be true to form of your other story and have this Blanche be as manipulative as Albus, I hope that you'll learn from the mistake of not making it more of a focus for the story. If not, well, it's your story and you're telling it so continue to do so.
Please update soon.
Geovanni Luciano
Author's response
- Physical strength without aggression is a null. If in this universe the people spooking the Megafawna over the cliffs had their plumbing internalized and those who gathered nuts grains and roots while caring for the children kept their plumbing externally it isn't all that much of a stretch. Remember you are forming your opinion of what is likely framed by our world, someone in an environment as I'm describing would say the same about ours...
- Think for a minute if you were to suddenly in your mid teens meet a female version of your self. Would you have a new best friend, or someone who creeped you the hell out? My Junior year in High school a very good friend of mine had an identical twin suddenly living with her and her mother. The parents had divorced when the twins were toddlers and each got custody of one kid, my friend's family unit moved to California where I met her. Our Junior year, her father died, and her sister, who she barely knew moved in with her. They were NOT friends, both resented the other because they shared a face. It was not pleasant. This is what I'm trying to do, without the hostility, but not buddies either.
- and the Fics with the two harry's bedding each other are just too weird for my taste.
- Blanch is going to be more controlling than manipulative.