(#) JBern 2008-05-22
Good chapter. It might have been interesting to have done the whole bit from Bella's POV and have the reader really "feel" the weight of the stares on her.
It's nice to see the Order in the light you have painted them. Far too often authors have the Order as a bunch of Dumbledore fangirls who don't stop to ask questions of their own. It's refreshing to see them actually questioning authority rather than blindly following it. Good job there.
Best of luck continuing.~Jim