I agree with everyone else, Very good for a first timer.
I also agree that I want to see a update soon. A cliffhanger mystery begs
for more clues than a powerful man that unnerves Dumbledore enough, that he DOESN'T try get to #4 first, to stop him.
And claims Harry is one of his?:
Grandparent,
Clan head,
Head of a group that his parents were part of,
Harry's an experiment, alien, X-man, etc.
Please, don't keep us hanging to long (puppy dog eyes).
Again, thanks for a good read.
May the MUSES always be with you!!!
^_^