Ok, here's what I think. Maybe the chapters should be longer, & some people get put off by long stories so be careful of that. Otherwise, it's pretty good.
Author's response
Thank you for the review!
Personally, I'd like longer chapters too, but because I'm dividing chapters based on POV I'm kind of stuck with how much my chars want to say. As for making the story too long - I'm not worried about how many people like it, so long as I know it's well written, lol.
Thanks again - I really appreciate it!
Lororie