ok,i have so much to say to you! one...this story is on my alerts list because i cannot afford to NOT keep reading!
this is SO well written! just ENOUGH description so that its not too much, but enough so it doesn't sound like its been written by an illiterate monkey (like some fan fiction Shudder).
you have also (and i truly applaud you for this!) cleverly avoided falling into writting a stereotypically emo character.
i will admit that at the first chapter i thought 'oh no. typical ryden. typical emo 'i'm-going-to-go-cut-my-wrist-now' story/character of ryan. but...i kept reading.
and i'm so glad that i did! you have depth to ryan's character. he's not just emo. he's flawed. and somehow the way you've written this, so we know he is flawed (with his blame games etc) and he knows it. i can't really put into words how you've avoided the stereotype...but you have. gah i'm befuddling myself, and probably you even more so...just know that i love the depth of this story!!! and keep writing!
Author's response
My, how this review made me smile.
I'm glad you think I'm not an illiterate monkey.
And I'm also very, very happy to hear someone say that I don't have too much description. I usually fear that I need to stop with all the adjectives and metaphors and just get to the point. But, hearing you say that I have just the right amount, makes me very pleased. :]
Emo Ryan? Well, when I first started writing this, I was unaware that Ryan could fall into the category of 'emo', but I soon realized that maybe he has. I just always thought he was majorly flawed and to be frank, rather fucked up.
But, I am so very, very happy that I had avoided the stereotype. [Because, quite frankly, I despise them.] And, I don't want this to be unoriginal and cliche, and well, stereotypical.
Thank you for the amazing review and I surely hope you read more. :]