Interesting so far. Nicely done with the Hermione/Fleur tease - man I wish I had a picture of that.
I am wondering when you'll have Harry find out about how Pansy is being treated at Eloise's. He's a genuine good guy, and while she may never have been pleasant to him, he's not the type to let that kind of suffering stand.
I do hope you have Cho's bit coming soon too - I dunno, I just have a thing for Asian girls (drool).
If Cho's bit is coming up soon, I would recommmend that it be more than Harry just suddenly taking her. Given how poorly things originally ended between them, they need to have a real 'talk' before she gives him her love (via her body). She may have been 'awakened' by Sirius, but I'd imagine she'd still harbor a great deal of guilt for trying to use Harry as a connection to Cedric.
Something for them to work through, I guess?
I am looking forward to Harry's encounter with the rest of the Chaser girls too...the old 'Catch'em in the Shower's' scene may be cliche, but its still so HOT!
Looking forward to more from you soon. Good work!
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Thanks, I wish I had a picture of the tease myself! GRIN
Pansy will be in a couple of chapters, Cho is next chapter. And I'm thinking that Unhappy is going to be the mildest word to describe Harry when he finds out what has happened to Pansy. And, after spending a year in the Republic of Korea (with a R&R in the PI) I certainly can understand your thing!
Good point about Harry and Cho, and it will be addressed at some point.
I'm still deciding if Harry is going to have a scene alone with Angelina or just go for the whole Chaser squad at one time GRIN
I'll have more posted in a day or so, Hell, I might even surprise myself and finish the chapter tonight, who knows?
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