Hello,
I wanted to say, I often find that an author saying "he was listening to such and such song by such and such band, and it got him all nostalgic" and other such drabble takes away from the story.
First, odds are most of your readers have no idea what you're talking about, and those who do probably don't recall the lyrics much, and can't imagine why would your protagonist have such a reaction to the song. Furthermore, in your story, you haven't established why HArry would wake up to such a song or how is it even possible that it would play at a magical area.
What you might want to do is actually write the lyrics of the song, and write how it came to be - someone was humming it to himsel fwhile sitting watch over Harry's bed. Something like that.
And use it a lot less - no more than once or twice in a fic of ten chapters with an average of 1500 words per chapter would probably be a good proportion.
WHat's good with FicWad is that, as far as I know, they don't ban song lyrics in the fics you post
The same goes, by the way, to writer writieng, in the midsdle of a fic, something along the lines of "compare it to this and that scene from this and that movie or TV series" instead of describing in writing what is happening. It makes for very poor fiction.
Here it is the same principle.
Regards,
-s.a.c.
Author's response
I had lyrics in chapter three, but I wiped almost all mention of them from the story after someone complained about them. I know that Dream Theater is rather obscure.
and as for Lyrics to say, 2112, Octavarium, and any other song I mention, Most of them are well past radio riendly song lengths, even if you removed the "instrumental Wankery"
Other than this, I really don't know what else to say.
Thank you for the review, it was well thought out, and the spelling was correct.
I did explain how the songs were played, if you sctually read the story, though.