Review for Alive and Loved
Alive and Loved
(#) gekiranger 2008-08-08 04:20:46 AM
I loved this story. The way it was so simply written was good and worked, because in a way it felt like it was Seishirou's point of view and though there were hints of emotions, they weren't expressed like a normal person would.
I liked the ending, though I felt that Seishirou's dialogue was a little forced. That was probably the one bit of the fic I feel could have been better, perhaps a little more enigmatic and less plain (as it seems like something Subaru would say, rather than Seishirou). Other than that, it was fantastic ^^
I liked the ending, though I felt that Seishirou's dialogue was a little forced. That was probably the one bit of the fic I feel could have been better, perhaps a little more enigmatic and less plain (as it seems like something Subaru would say, rather than Seishirou). Other than that, it was fantastic ^^
Author's response
First, thank you for taking the time to review^_^
Seishirou's dialogue didn't satisfy me either but in this instance he wanted to push Subaru and later he was lying alone and talking to himself. I figure people are more honest when they know they can't be heard.
Seishirou's dialogue didn't satisfy me either but in this instance he wanted to push Subaru and later he was lying alone and talking to himself. I figure people are more honest when they know they can't be heard.
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