Review for B.D.P.D.

B.D.P.D.

(#) Vanir 2008-08-10 01:52:23 PM

Erm, the description was intriguing, but so far the story doesn't match. I'm quite aware that magic and werewolves aren't really believable on their own, but a kid that age lifting weights and actually exercising? Dodgy, to say the least. With another k or two, you could have fleshed out the childhood superification a bit and made it more believable. Further, the reference to Remus was just wrong and had nothing to do in this chapter. I understand you were trying to paint an image for us, but that's not necessary. If we had no imagination, we wouldn't be here.
Putting the flamethrower down, you caught my interest, and i will certainly read the next chapter.
Keep at it.

Vanir

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