Review for You Stole My Breath

You Stole My Breath

(#) XxIceCreamHeadachexX 2008-08-13

Oh God.
Oh God.
Oh God.






Holy crap! This was just too breathtaking to describe. I mean, with the protesters, the nurse, the clinic, everything was so.... Real. It was as though I was sitting there, right next to Cassia, just awaiting this fate.

This has to be one of my favorite chapters, I swear. It was written in perfection. Gahh, how do you do it? You just totally blow my mind!

And I'm glad she didn't go through with it, but somewhat in the middle of this chapter, I kind of figured that she was there for an abortion. My heart was just racing, my fingers trembling, not knowing if she were to actually go through with it. Oh man, you are just so awesome.

And I know this is slightly off-topic, buuuuuut-- I love your summaries. With the whole 'FACT' things. It's just really cool.


I don't know. You are just like a really amazing author. I mean, even you put your summaries saying, "EAT DONKEY, BIZNATCH!" I would somehow still think it's great. Of course, there wouldn't be any explainable reason for you to put "Eat donkey, biznatch" anyway...

Okay, now I'm just rambling. Well, marvelous chapter. I certainly enjoyed it. :]

Update soon! :]

Author's response

I was told in the one and only creative writing class I ever took to "show" not "tell", so yours is one of the best compliments I can receive. Seeing as I'm not especially funny, I think the big draw of my writing is setting a realistic scene. You make me feel as though I've succeeded. I highly doubt there will be any donkey's in this sorry, unfortunately. haha. (see what I mean about not being funny) Anyway. New chapter soon.