Review for Untold Paradox

Untold Paradox

(#) Moonshyne 2008-08-22

Hi there Dondon,

Pooe Jamia and Frank they are both so devestated. I loved reading it.


Juat one small hint of criticism. When someone new is speaking it should be a new paragraph. It just makes it so much easier to read. Other than that it's great.

Author's response

I know there both silly!

Im sorry about the paragraph thing, I always forget.

Thanks for your review :)