My faith in fanfic authors has been renewed after reading this story. The style and mechanics used are advanced, especially when one compares it to the rest of fanfiction. The plot is well-developed, with fleshed-out characters, great humor, and an excellent vocabulary. But possibly the one thing I would grade you the highest on would be the actual idea of the story. With 100,000+ stories of Harry Potter around the net, it's hard to find anything original, but you pulled it off beautifully. This story gets a 10/10 in my book, and i hope you update soon.