WoW that was great and well worth the wait! So I take it the voice is his mum? love to see all the manipulations of dumbydork unravelling, I hope you also show when the wizengamot looks at the other proxy's that dumbydork has and finds out that he forged or outright lied in claiming all those proxy's and estates...maybe a little jail time for the great manipulator wouldnt hurt!
Oh yea and about the flamers, I find that most flamers havent ever written a single story anywhere on the net! I usually dont flame someone other than to tell them they need to get a spellchecker or proof read their stories really bad....In your story, your doing okay except that the name of parkingson in your story is actually parkinson and treacy is actually tracy!