Review for To Sin Alone
The only thing I can think of to criticize is the paragraph lengths. This story has a bunch of very short, choppy paragraphs, which does add to the gritty atmosphere, but it might tighten up the piece to consolidate a few of them into longer paragraphs. A short, one-sentence paragraph has serious impact, but if too many of them happen in a row, they start to lose that pound-the-point-home feeling.
In the spring of her sixth year, Hermione realizes she has something in common with the youngest Wea...
In: Harry Potter
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Not a liar..
A not-so-creepy creepypasta for Jazzy. Enjoy :3
Kiss me while I shoot the bad guys, and this rainy day can last forever.
Abigail 14 runs away from the orphanage becuse she believes that she'll never find a family who love...
In: G.I. Joe
Sequel to "Answer" (Fluffy domestic bickering some time after the wedding. (Dialogue only.)...)