Review for To Sin Alone
The only thing I can think of to criticize is the paragraph lengths. This story has a bunch of very short, choppy paragraphs, which does add to the gritty atmosphere, but it might tighten up the piece to consolidate a few of them into longer paragraphs. A short, one-sentence paragraph has serious impact, but if too many of them happen in a row, they start to lose that pound-the-point-home feeling.
It's been 10 years, but these wounds don't seem to heal.
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