I like the story.. Vampires are cool.. Now that he bit Hermione, he'll wake up in the morning all blubbery, oh Hermione, what did i do??
Boo Hoo.. lol.. Just kidding.. When he killed Bella he should have twisted her head so she was looking at her butt, then ripped her neck open and start sucking her aorta.. Now that would have been a horrific scene that would send terror to the deatheaters.. Then stand there with his fist in the air saying,'this ones for you Sirius'... Any way, can't wait for the next chapter..