Review for Harry Potter and the fledgling phoenix

Harry Potter and the fledgling phoenix

(#) Terris 2009-06-25 10:30:38 AM

Very good start! You have good style. It can be polished a little, but I believe this comes with time. Just keep writing :)

The only problems I have are how easy it was to make Harry ward of the school and second, how can anyone leave 11 year old boy alone for one month in a hotel. That itself is criminal...

Author's response

Stranger things have happened and from what i've read the wizarding world isnt renowned for its childcare.

I think especially in a case of taking a magical child away from a muggle family it would be that easy due to the massive amount of bias towards magic

i appreciate the comments though and it hs given me stuff to think about which i like

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