I like your version of a few characters.
I always thought McGonagall was too meek when it came to how Harry was treated. She's a stern task master in class and I expected her to be the same out of it.
He sees Ron for what he is, that should change the Gryffindor three.
I like how Mrs. Longbottom is being portrayed not to mention the budding frendship with Neville.
There's not much I found fault with given you've done one re-write already.
Having said that WHERE's Hermione????
McKitty is how i think she should have been, strong with a strict set of morals
There will be no Gryffindor 3
I like my Neville too
We will meet Hermione on the train
Thank you for taking the time to review i appreciate it