i'm going to have to agree and disagree with everyone about your story. the premise is great, i love the storyline no questions about that. the writing though, it was good for about the first 3-4 chapters but after that it started droning on. the characters really have no feeling to them. its like if they're robots or something and while you explain things that are being done its too much explaining and not enough story imo. don't get me wrong i enjoy the story but i'd say this is a bit lackluster.