I know this story is super old but I've re-read it three times now and really wanna know how it ends. Your writing us amazing. It reminds me of Stephen King, the way you put in the thoughts and lyrics halfway through a paragraph. And the main character is unlike any other. A slob haha. Truthfully she reminds me of myself, and the way you're writingit to someone was exactly how I started a story a few years back and never finished. The style is so similar. This story... It's not just another story. It's something more. It's driving me crazy not knowing if it will end. It really should be finished, it's brilliant. Please write more.
Tegan (yeah that was the whole reason I first started reading your story. It's too coincidental)