Review for Portals, Steam and Magic

Portals, Steam and Magic

(#) The_Resident 2009-10-16

If you intended to fix spelling and grammar along with the plot/storyline, I am sorry to say you failed. You need and editor to correct your spelling (yours is atrocious) and grammar errors and a beta to make sure your characters are in character and you are actually following the storyline you mapped out (/You did map out the storyline, didn't you?/) and to aid you with geographic references, et. al.