That was really well-written. It flowed nicely together and you said alot without giving away too much. It was discriptive, yet vague enough to keep you hooked.
Author's response
Thankyou very much ^_^
I wrote it in the crazy hours (2,3am maybe) and... well, things don't make too much sense then. Can't read over stuff. It hurts my head when I've not slept in a while.
So, yeh, I don't think it had much of a point or followed the theme very well but thanks loads xx