In my opinion, you did not go to far in with this story. It's still interesting and unique. You've been doing a good job on this. And I hope you continue farther :D
Author's response
I could kiss you right now...in a total non creepy way!
No but really, thank you. I like to just add random ideas and stuff into normal stories like that, instead of like normal stories? I don't know. Heh. Rambling. When this does spiral out of control, be the first to tell me yeah? XD
F oxox.