god (ha!), I don't even know how to begin… have you posted this somewhere else too? you really should consider it, if not, because this story is too awesome to be on this, more or less, dead page… (which would explain the no-comments yet, because there is no other explanation – your story is brilliant (okay, I've only read the first chapter so far, but… so well written: from his thoughts and the difference to hers – really well done, in my opinion. you really find a difference here, it's not like all the fanfics for example – written in a girl's thoughts all the way, no matter if it's about a boy or girl. does this make sense? anyway, this should have many more readers… it's brilliant. I'm gonna download the rest immediately.
oh, and your descriptions? – brilliant x 2:
- " He leaned back in his chair, stretching out his thin, ragged wings. "
…there were so many parts like this, that I loved, I can't even quote them all…
- 'It became clear that his methods were troublingly "Old Testament;"'
…hehe, yeah. love the humour too XD
(found your story through your post in the forum, btw.)