(#) olafr 2010-04-23
It's great to see you back again, and with a story that's as intriguing as usual. Like some others, while I do quite like HHr ships, also applaud movements outside that relationship... besides which, 15 really isn't anywhere near old enough to form a permanent relationship.
I quite like the time-travelling Harry as a plot device, as it offers an excuse for too-adult thinking on his behalf. The hard part is, of course, the characters around him. Hermione is easiest, I think.
Anway, a good start and I look forward to where you plan to take the story... and thanks for sharing your work with us.