While the premise of the story is sound, and not something I've seen before. The writing style leaves much to be desired.
I rated the story +1 for originality.
The problem with the story is that you need a beta reader. You have a tendency to beat the reader over the head with information, giving it from multiple character POV's. This means that instead of the information being fresh and new, the reader gets the feeling they are being called stupid because they obviously can't remember what you wrote in the previous sentence.
One sentence that shows this graphically is...
'They're on each leg of his legs was a white cast on each of his legs'
Instead of just...
He had casts on both his broken legs.
The story would have been a third of its current length if you'd done that.
Once more, having said that the story has a good underlying theme that I could have gotten into if you didn't seem to have abandoned it.