First its well written and draws in the reader to not only care about the characters but wants to see where this will lead.
My one critique is that with this being set after Voldyfarts buys it, and that Harry & Hermione not only have a romance but marry only to see that die because of a sole incident where Hermione would have checked all her sources as she is above all things a bookworm and a top knotch researcher?
No if anything this is more like a 'Ginny' sort of reaction.
But as I said this is well written so I'll stick it out and see if they can reconcile, cause if this goes to canon pairings it would be a waste of time imho.
Author's response
I get your point about Hermione, but she struck me as the kind of person who after always relying on logic and books for answers, love would be the one thing she couldn't.
I've learned that sometimes falling in love, you can't help the baser reactions, ie in this case jealousy. Besides I dislike canon pairings though sometimes, they might serve a larger purpose in the bigger picture.
But thanks for your commentary, hope you'll continue reading. I'll be updating very soon