I very much agree with lycus. I can see Hermione blowing a gasket about the apparent cheating. While looking so self-assured I think she does have an extremely low self esteem and lack of confidence in relationships. The formative years for her were lonely and she never had the chance to learn about personal relationships. Later on at Hogwarts, per canon anyway, many if no most people still openly stood apart from her. Even with Ron and Harry you could see she was just waiting for the other shoe to drop. Look at her previous canon relationship. Ron certainly did nothing to boost her self esteem. As far as the story itself, the first chapter was very vague, but you've filled some it nicely. I'd like to know more of the specifics of what the Weasleys did though. Even though it has only been 4 chapters, I can see improvements in your style. This chapter, 4, was so poignant. It's been several months since an update so I hope you have several chapters waiting to go.
Author's response
Thanks for continuing to give me such great comments about my story, gives me the motivation to continue.
But yes, I wanted to portray that even with Harry, whom Hermione shouldn't have to worry about cheating, is still susceptible to human follies. If you think about it, having such a huge thing happen, it doesn't have to be cheating just something like it.
The first instinct of most people is to lash out and these are the consequences of that. They're human and although the whole thing with Voldemort is over, now life begins.