What?! We get all of the awkward, a little sweet, but none of the bumping uglies?!
I don't know about Dave, but I want my money back. ;)
Good otherwise.
Author's response
On the one hand, I appreciate reassurance that I won't drive people away when I get to that point...
On the other, the point of that chapter, besides staking out a right to do what I pleased with the story, was to show a contrast between Sybil's perception of the weight and darkness of the wizarding world versus how she feels in the muggle one -- that's a specific effect I want to use in measured quantities. Turning it into a sex scene would have been too distracting at the outset, for my purposes.
There's also the factor that Sybil has a lot of serious issues that I want to deal with carefully. Her life is not particularly sane or healthy.