Review for Let's Try That Again, Shall We?

Let's Try That Again, Shall We?

(#) mirabilos 2011-02-25

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Next day, in Defence Against the Dark Arts class.

“Ladies and Gentlemen, today we’re having two assistants during the
practical part of the lesson… well, during the lesson, that is.” The
class perked up at that. “I present to you…

“… the brothers Weasley!” – Groaning went through the room. Charlie
wondered what the two (and the weird teacher!) were up to this time,
whereas a particularily loud-mouth Gryffindor shouted what they were to
learn from _second-years_ out of all things! Professor Eeles merely
countered “well, you’re a NEWT level class, so you’re supposed to be
better than them, right?”

To which the loud-mouth readily agreed, while Charlie became wary.

“Today’s exercise: everyone takes a school broom – no hurrying, I will
assign them – and goes up in the air. I will provide pellets of mud into
the air, and you, gentlemen and -ladies, are to hit each other with
these while maintaining a shield charm. If you’re hit, you will come
down. The whole of the class is up against the Weasley brothers, well
all three of them to make it even.”

Laughter.

• _.,-=~=-,._ • Later, on the Quidditch pitch • _.,-=~=-,._ •

Charlie had managed to keep up his shield charm while flying, but had
been absolutely no help in hitting. Tonks had her first “official”
encounter with the Twins and couldn’t help but be amazed – while she had
been an Auror, she didn’t cheat, but they managed to distract her and
Forge got her in the back while strengthening her shield against Gred
and Charlie in the front – before she, or anyone else, for that matter,
knew he couldn’t aim while maintaing a shield. The rest of the class was
fair game after that, and a particularily loud-mouth (well, no longer…)
Gryffindor was docked in no less than seven mud pellets. Gred and Forge
made a good job out of it while not neglecting _their_ own basic level
shield charm (some of the class used higher-level ones, but couldn’t
hold them up long enough in the end).

On the ground, Professor Eeles tried to conceal his laughter while
Professor Dumbledore – as usual seeming to appear out of thin air when
there was fun to watch – didn’t even attempt to. He did, however, assign
fifty points to Gryffindor for a lesson well taught.

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Wow, I think I just wrote my first piece of fanfiction, even if it’s set
in the “Let's Try That Again, Shall We?” universe, not the Potterverse.
If you want, I’ll put up disclaimer and licence. I didn’t particularily
care whether the NEWT class was all houses combined, Tonks had
“officially” met the Twins before or was only a sixth-year at that point
(and didn’t bother looking it up), just wanted to get the idea out.

Have fun!

Author's response

I would have replied to this right away, but I was kind of at a loss for words. I still am! I am deeply honored!

Fanfics with far more words, readers, and reviews do not get this. My gold standard of fanfic popularity -- Harry Potter and the Methods of Rationality -- did not get any until chapter 53, and Eliezar has much longer chapters than I do!

As to the issue of who knows whom, for my purposes Tonks has not introduced herself to the twins yet in this timeline, although she does in the next chapter I will post. As to Fred and George, it is not yet clear to _them_ that skills useful for juggling and food fights are also useful for dueling. Eeles doesn't realize it isn't obvious to other people, and so says nothing, and Dumbledore has his own conflicted reasons for not saying anything either (he is deliberately training them to fight, but doesn't want to spoil their innocence, more or less). The twins probably can't get to the level in your story until the end of the year at the earliest -- I'll explain why once the story gets to Christmas. Otherwise, it's exactly the sort of thing I think Eeles would do. :)