This is awesome!! :D The only problem is with the dialogue, for each new speaker, you go down a line
eg. "How was work today, Frank?" Bob asked.
"Boring as watching paint dry, maybe even more boring!" Frank exclaimed.
It makes it easier to read and easier to follow. But other than that, this is really good and I really like it :) Hope you'll be able to get more done soon!!
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