I thought the original was already briliant. But this one speachless... So I knew how the story would end it cept me and didn't let go till I read it to the end. Wonderful! The best sentence however was "Angry at being denied, angry at having his possession taken from him, and like a spoilt child ready to shout and scream until it was returned." Also the story was very sad I couldn't stop laughing. Asami stamping on the floor crying like a child was just too much for my imagination ^^
Thanks for writing this story!