I only got to chapter 9 and couldn't read anymore, I feel it was boring and unoriginal. Author needs to take more care with sentence structure as it didn't flow properly at times. The switching of POV's so often and repetition of scenes gets irritating and, again, boring.
With a better storyline, the author could have real potential.
Oh, Okay. Thanks for the sugestion. Some like it, some don't. I'll do the best that I can. I'm only 14, still got lots of time for practice I guess(: