Your writing is good, but i'd like you to write not only about peripheral characters but also how their behaviour affects central canon characters, so far you've written just 2-3 chapters out of 50. Also in peripheral characters you should devote some time to develope villains too, coz hero is no hero untill villain is worth something. The way you're writing it's good to read of course, but in terms of overall story, the plot doesn't progress without protagonist & antagonist.