Review for Confessions of a Protective Older Brother
Confessions of a Protective Older Brother
(#) Rous 2006-10-10 06:26:03 PM
Well, as promised, I came and read. Very interesting take on Michael's thoughts. Now, while I disagree with the other reviewer, I do have a few issues with this. Grammar being one and for the other. There are some punctuation issues that could be cleared up with a bit of attention.
The biggest thing, though, is the lack of substance. You tell a good story, but it lacks depth. More description would help. Some of the sentences could be combined to form paragraphs. I think work in the form is definately needed.
Otherwise, I found this very much in line with the book and the movie. Thank you for sharing.
The biggest thing, though, is the lack of substance. You tell a good story, but it lacks depth. More description would help. Some of the sentences could be combined to form paragraphs. I think work in the form is definately needed.
Otherwise, I found this very much in line with the book and the movie. Thank you for sharing.
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