Review for Death Kills
Death Kills
(#) tortillachip 2011-11-16 06:16:59 PM
This is great!! I love Frank in this. When he's counting to three, it really shows that he would do anything for Mikey. "I feel like I've lost both of the important people in my life. My brother to a tragic accident that fate's cruel hand smeared onto his undeserving soul. And my Frankie to his longing to make everything better; to fill the gaping gap that only my brother can fill." I like that paragraph because it shows how concerned Frank is about Mikey. He knows something's wrong, and he's trying his best, but he's still not helping as much as he'd like. He even tried to kill himself just to help Mikey. I've seen a lot of caring and loving Franks, but I think yours is one of the best because it's kinda rare when the author would make the characters attempt to kill themselves together. One other thing I like is the transition from sad to cute and sweet. I really like cute Frikey kisses, especially when after that kiss they become something special. I really like the way you write. It really keeps the readers interested. Well, great job.
Author's response
Thank you very much! I wasn't sure if I ended it right, but I'm glad you liked it! Thank you soooo much for taking the time to review - it means a lot! ;)
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