Wow this chapter is so well though about and written out really well. It's really cool how you can write out all of that and still stay on the same scene. It's just... Brilliant. I like the ending of the chapter too. The way mikey is having a nightmare and then it just ends with who I presume Gerard shouts "Mikey!". Theres just so much suspense. Update soon!
Author's response
Thank you very much; I'm relieved that it didn't come across as confusing! I'm extremely glad that you liked it and that I managed to create some suspense. Thank you soooo much for being so nice about my writing and taking the time to review; I'm very grateful! :)