I think this chapter is really good and it makes sense. You shouldn't worry so much. What I like about this chapter is how Mikey says something, and then would think 'Do I really mean that? Of course I don't." It really shows how unsure he is of himself. I also like how Mikey would blame himself for everything. It was a clever way to show how insecure he is and how people have put him down enough to make him believe it. I also like how Frank is so willing to help him and he's so understanding about everything, but Mikey still can't trust him. Or at least trust him fully. It's really interesting when you write in Mikey's point of view because you get to see more about what he feels and thinks and all that stuff, but it would also be really interesting to see how Gerard feels about Frank being able to comfort Mikey. There are so many sides to this story and all those thing hold your interest. It's like you can't help but wonder what's going to happen next. Great job, as always.
Author's response
Thank you very much!
I'm glad that you liked and got when Mikey kept doubting/contradicting himself, that was the part that I was unsure about. I wanted to make it clear how lost he is and how low his self-esteem/confidence is.
I think I'm going to write the next chapter in Gerard's POV. I was torn between Frank and Gerard, but your review has settled it, so thanks for helping me to decide.
Thank you very much for taking the time to leave such a detailed and helpful review! :)