This story has got me really interested. I dont think that Chloe is a morbid and depressed chick; I think anyone would be in that situation. And it was very... Different? Original? How you made her and Panic! meet. I've only ever read one story slightly similar to how they meet, which is good, it means that its not over-done. Rather than the whole cliched meet-at-a-concert-and-after-one-minute-of-knowing-each-other-they-fall-in-love thing. I'll be interested to see how this goes.
The only thing that kinda ruined it for me was the fact that there were a few mistakes - spelling and grammar wise. Maybe you could get a beta? It's just an idea, you dont have to.
Author's response
Thank you! I'm really glad you like it, I hope you like where this is headed.
And thank you for being honest! I think I love getting constructive criticism more than anything. I love getting good reviews but I'm always like, "Yeah, but what don't you like about it?" Anything that'll make my writing better is something I want to hear! I know I'm not the best.
Thanks so much for reviewing!