Review for Vampires


(#) XxPerfectTomorrowxX 2012-02-19

I'm sorry but this just... is unreadable.
It would be great if you spaced things out, used capitalization and re-checked your work before posting... There are just too many errors.
Great try though. I see this was posted awhile ago.
Hopefully you've already improved from this point. And hopefully this doesn't come off as insulting. If so, I apologize.