Review for JEDI POTTER
I did like the chapter it was a nice little wrap up, on Petunia I can see understand why Harry let her off at the end, and I also understand why a lot of people were angry about that, in story, but they got to understand she was in the same routine for what 2 decades, that even if Harry said she can do whatever she wanted she would still be doing the same routine because that’s all she knows. When Vernon died, yes I know he was an evil bastard to the core, I couldn’t help but feel sorry for Petunia. Though inwardly I think Dudley would feel relieved at Vernon’s death, he would also feel guilty for feeling that way.
The only thing that really irked me about the story was how open Harry was, to taking out Dumbledore, to complete strangers (i.e. the special agent that met them in America). I know Harry can read minds to determine if a person is trustworthy or not, but still that just doesn’t sit right. During the first read through it didn’t bother me but after multiple read throughs it really stood out.
Other than that I absolutely love your writing style and the story was an absolute wonderful read. I look forward to reading your stories in the future. Thank you so much for this adventure.
and the commenter
Richard I think he is living up to his name.
I hope things work out for you in real life.
I’m glad you enjoyed the story. It was a lot of fun to write, but a huge job at the same time.
I warms my heart, that people will not only read the story, but read it again. (Does a Snoopy dance!)
Finished: Yeah, I forgot to mark it as complete until I think, a month after the fate. (Blushes)
While I like getting reviews, they’re not eh end-all of writing for em. There are still many places I can improve and for me, reviewers tell me how. That’s why I prefer detailed reviews to ‘Gr8 chappy, want more’.
I thought it was a bit rushed, myself, but it had already reached 12,000 words, and there were so many things to tie up. Funny how it started out to be a two-chapter, ‘screw the wizarding world, I’m not going back’ story.
I had Harry let her off, because she did something he never expected. She took responsibility for her sins. Finishing up her community service voluntarily, was something Vernon would never have done. And you’re right, in both cases. I am a firm believer of ‘love with discipline’, and Dr Spock was a moron striking for idiot and failing the course. Yes, Vernon was a real piece of work, but how much of that hatred was his, and how much came from Dumbledore’s manipulations? I wonder if Vernon would have turned his abuse on her had Harry not been there. On the other hand, he was her husband, and the loss of a spouse (any loved one for that matter) always hurts. Trust me on this.
The same thing goes for Dudley. It seems no matter how awful your parents can be, you always want to remember them. A case in point: My father was a total bastard. A violent alcoholic, with a penchant for beating children with whatever he could find, for whatever he could find. I was removed from his control when I was about ten, and for the next ten years I absolutely hated holidays, because I would recall all too vividly how he ‘dealt’ with them. (He got drunk and beat us.) I had PTSD before I joined the military. Still, when he died in ’06, I still said a prayer to the four winds for his spirit.
I have to disagree. Harry only told the people around him what they needed to know. The problem as I see it, is that secrecy can be carried to extremes. (Canon Dumbledore) He was more forthcoming than Dumbledore, but he still kept his security intact. The agent in the US; he only told them what they already knew or needed to know. While I was in charge of a fire team, or later on as a Senior P.O. or Chief, I would tell my people what hey needed to know to get the job done. I wouldn’t hide information, cause that’s the best way to et your people dead.
I’m truly happy you enjoyed the ride. It was both a major labor and a pleasure to write.
When I have things settled a bit more, I will have more stories up.
~and the commenter Richard I think he is living up to his name.~
There are always going to be people who have a difference of opinion. It sucks, but there it is.
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