Yeah, you're using a lot of run on sentences and it wouldn't be so bad if you threw in a couple of commas here and there, but I have yet to read a chapter that I didn't like. One: this story is epic in terms of length. Two: the content is intellectually stimulating along with just plain hot. Three: You're still going at it! (which is more than most can say) Currently I'm reading this on the hpfanficarchive due to the fact this cite messes up chapters from time to time, but I like the review system on this one better. Cheers and keep it coming.