Review for The Disenchanted Youth
The Disenchanted Youth
(#) DisenchatedDestroya 2012-02-29 12:52:42 PM
This is incredible, it captures so many relatable emotions and thoughts; you really are extremely clever with the way you word things.
My favorite part was probably,
"No one notices,
The black rainbow lies."
I love the whole "black rainbow" paradox, it really speaks to me and I can imagine that it, along with the rest of this, speaks to a lot of other people as well. It takes a hell of a lot of talent to write something so identifiable and meaningful; these are of an almost professional standard!
The one thing that I would say could use a little work is the rhythm, but other than that this is prefect!
You have absolutely no reason to be nervous about posting this; if I could write half as well as you clearly can I'd be proud of every syllable. Fantastic job!
:)
My favorite part was probably,
"No one notices,
The black rainbow lies."
I love the whole "black rainbow" paradox, it really speaks to me and I can imagine that it, along with the rest of this, speaks to a lot of other people as well. It takes a hell of a lot of talent to write something so identifiable and meaningful; these are of an almost professional standard!
The one thing that I would say could use a little work is the rhythm, but other than that this is prefect!
You have absolutely no reason to be nervous about posting this; if I could write half as well as you clearly can I'd be proud of every syllable. Fantastic job!
:)
Author's response
Wow, thank you so much! Yeah, I agree about the rhythm...Will have to edit that. Thanks so much for taking the time to review and being so lovely...made my day :D
CosmicZombie xo
CosmicZombie xo
Filter
You won't see stories with a lower score when you browse or search. Log in to adjust filter.
0
Featured Story
-
Forfeit
by MyNameOkay (PG-13)Taylor, a very shy 13yr old, an average teenager starts to rebel.
In: Drama
Site Stats
- Authors: 198257
- Stories: 39140
Recent Stories
-
Summertime
by mcrobsessed99 (PG-13)Summer romances can follow you home. And the lies will too. (Frerard)
-
Welcome to SPD
by redranger (G)A spunky young Pokemon tranier is asked to Join SPD after she is recued form Broodwing. will her sec...
In: Power Rangers
-
Welcome to Reefside
by redranger (G)Tracy the new girl from Michigan. she was force to move to Reefside because of her mother's job acci...
In: Power Rangers
-
For Anyone Who Reads My Stories
by intoyouricyblues (PG-13)This is kinda important.
-
ROLEPLAY AVENGERS TEAM NEEDED!
by BoomBoomJude (G)YES. AN AVENGERS ROLEPLAY TEAM. YOU WILL BE GREAT.