Review for The Power
An enjoyable chapter. ^_^
A few little things: "Hermione was also [very worried] about Voldemort. After Harry had told her about the unicorns Hagrid had mentioned, Hermione became [very worried]." The repeated use isn't all that pleasant. Maybe cutting out the "very worried" the first time and leaving it for the second. (yeah, that's the end of my "concerns")
I loved this line: Hermione sighed. "Trust you to save the world out of spite. Fine, I'll go with you."
Amusing. ^_^ I look forward to reading more!
Author\'s Response: I know how cruel cliffhangers can be, and I'm sorry. It just seemed like too good a place to end the chapter to pass up. Thanks for the critique on my [very worried] repeating. Now that I read it, I can see that it doesn't look very good, and I'm going to have to change it. As always, thank you for the review.
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