Review for The Power
An enjoyable chapter. ^_^
A few little things: "Hermione was also [very worried] about Voldemort. After Harry had told her about the unicorns Hagrid had mentioned, Hermione became [very worried]." The repeated use isn't all that pleasant. Maybe cutting out the "very worried" the first time and leaving it for the second. (yeah, that's the end of my "concerns")
I loved this line: Hermione sighed. "Trust you to save the world out of spite. Fine, I'll go with you."
Amusing. ^_^ I look forward to reading more!
Author\'s Response: I know how cruel cliffhangers can be, and I'm sorry. It just seemed like too good a place to end the chapter to pass up. Thanks for the critique on my [very worried] repeating. Now that I read it, I can see that it doesn't look very good, and I'm going to have to change it. As always, thank you for the review.
Heat's going to be there for his leader, whatever it is that Serph needs. Mild m/m.
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