Amazing! Pete's voice is written so well. From what he seems like in this chapter, he puts so much emotion into one thing. He sometimes thinks with his heart, not his head. He believes in true love and love at first sight and gets one glance at Mikey and decides that he is in love. It could be because Mikey is cute and different than what he's used to, but he knows it's because of the feeling he got from just being around him, even in his unconscious state. He can sense that Mikey is something special. He loves so easily that maybe it isn't hard for him to distinguish between what real love is and what he had before. He's experienced the same thing so many times that the one time he feels something different, it's so strong that he knows it has to be true love. He doesn't even really know anything for sure about Mikey besides what Mikey told him. He guessed about the other things like the bullying. I loved Pete's observations about Mikey, like the bruise on his collarbone and how shy he seems. How amazing he could be if he could learn to trust again. I loved how Pete is determined to make Mikey his and make him happy. I thought it was really interesting to see because it doesn't really seem as if the story is moving too quickly and it really makes sense. It doesn't seem as if Pete just saw Mikey and fell in love with him. It seems like so much more. Also, I really loved when Gerard came back and Pete figured Mikey's smiles were just fakes. It seems like it'll make him want to work much harder to get Mikey to smile a real smile. Well, this was amazing. I really loved it and thought it was well written. I hope this review made sense and I can't wait for more!!!
Author's response
Thanks! I'm glad you think that I wrote Pete's voice well, he does definitely put of a lot of emotion into things. In this it is certainly a case of him using his heart to think instead of his head, hence him believing in true love/love at first sight. He could just be basing it on looks alone, but he isn't; it's kinda like something else is there, telling him that Mikey's a very special person. Perhaps he does love a little too easily, something that may or may not be a bad thing. I'm glad you liked his little observations; he just wants to learn enough to be able to teach Mikey how to trust and love. He will want to be working a lot harder now to get a genuine smile, that's for sure!
Thank you very, very much for taking the time to leave such a helpful and detailed review! Thanks! :D