Review for Together
(#) CatscanFlyy 2012-04-18 10:18:20 AM
I love how you give us little snippets of the past without rushing into anything too quickly it really gives time for the characters to build and for us to wonder
I also meant to say on the last review when it was Pete's POV that I loved how you used short sentences it gave the effect of Pete being a little hyper off of the sweets and coffee and it let us see how he thinks clearly
I can't wait for more you have such a way with words and you always leave me wanting to know exactly what's going to happen next so update soon?
Awesome chapter! xD
I'm trying to add little bits of back-story as it goes on, so it's nice to know that you're liking that.
The short sentence thing of last chapter wasn't intentional, but now that you mention it I see what you mean. I'm definitely gonna try to do that for future Pete chapters; thanks for pointing it out!
Thank you very much for taking the time to leave such a detailed review! :D
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