Review for Our Lips Touch

Our Lips Touch

(#) imakilljoywannabe 2012-07-31 08:35:46 PM

I think it might be interesting to add Gerard somewhere to kind of show how he perceives the whole thing, but if you want to keep it in Frank's it might add more suspense!

Author's response

I’ve been thinking the same thing, about maybe doing Gerard’s Prospective but I don't know.

I feel I might stuff it up if I start writing two personalities. But then if I did change prospective then things might be clearer to understand the situation. But then again suspense keeps the reader on their toes and hungry for more, plus they can identify themselves the main character (Frank) because of the uncertainty of the other person :)

dose that make sense, or am I just talking shit?

Lol oh well anyway…

Keep commenting on my chapters and let me know if I need to start doing Gerard’s Prospective if it’s not making sense or something like that. Thanks for commenting.

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