Review for My Heart

My Heart

(#) anonymowriter 2012-08-05 01:18:28 AM

It's adorable. But as a bit of constructive criticism... I'd say that it would be a good idea to put in a little more background before he gives him the paper. Because the reader didn't know that he liked him, not really. It's not very apparent at all. It seemed a bit sudden. Like you could put in flashbacks or put in some description of how he feels, you know? I hope that helped. I did like it though. It was really cute.

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