OK. Here it goes.
Firstly, WOW.
Second, the plot was flawless and the integrity to the truth of your characters is immaculate. This is sign of a great writer.
Thirdly, I'm so sad this story will end but it has to, it isn't realistic to keep on writing, and I can't wait to read your future stories.
A couple of my favourite bits from this chapter were:
I just put my head down. I was so tired. I was tired of defending Pete, of hearing I'm sorry, of making up excuses, and especially of seeing that look of disappointment in Patrick's face. I was tired of it all. I adore the sentence structure here, I use this format a lot in my own writing but I love to see others do it too.
/"I'm going to miss you too, but you have to go get all smart," he said smiling down on me.
"And you have to go get famous," I said back. /
This is great line......
Well done. I mean it. I could hug you now.
Author's response
Thanks so much for the too nice review. I had a lot of fun writing this story. I enjoyed the characters greatly. And I accept your hug via computer screen :)