Ah, this story is so wonderful! I love how long your chapters always are. It makes me feel bad, 'cause mine seem really short compared to these...
And don't feel bad if there's a bit of OOCness going around, it can't be avoided sometimes. (To help with that, you can read the manga online or something, yeah?) Haha...I made a character joke...
Oh! And I wanted to say, in a past chapter-or-other, at one point you had a character thinking,and there were no marks or anything. Like... oh noes! I really loves so-and-so but my angsty angstness overrides my reasoning to tell them! the girl walked over to el elefante anaranjado y...
Kind like that, where it switches from thought to action without..anything. But yours had less stupidness and was in only one language. (Don't even try to make sense of my bad Spanish, I tried to say "the orange elephant and...")
Gah! This is really long.... Anyways, update when you can 'cause I'll end up checking every day....