i will admit the lack of transition (textually.. descriptivly.. i am using a cell phone if there are lines or symbolic page breaks i cant see them) detracts from the piece. yes clearly harry is talking to mcgonagal about his future... but is it via floo, is he reflecting on his talk with her while visiting teddy, or is he reflecting on his visit with teddy while talking to mcgonagal... the lack of descriptors about where and what is going on as you can see hurt the ability to understand not only where but when the sequence of evets is occuring. concreetly what is happening is up in the air.
on the other hand emotionally this piece shines. his interactions with teddy and andromia (sp) are sweet and feel real. his uncertianty of what next resontes not only through harry but for anyone who thought they knew what they wanted only to find out what they need has changed.
so all in all it balances out.
and i do appologize for the lack of caps nd grammer foul ups. its a limited phone with the cap button being broke...